The New York Times: "Juveniles Injustice"
http://www.nytimes.com/2012/11/25/opinion/sunday/juvenile-injustice-and-the-states.html?ref=editorials&_r=0
The New York Times editorial "Juvenile Injustice" discusses the criminal justice system when it comes to juvenile delinquents. The voice of the article strongly suggests it is against how juveniles are being treated unjustly, as shown in the title.
The discussion of the supreme court's ruling that Miller vs. Alabama was "cruel and unusual punishment", sways the audiences opinion in a very strong way. This detail is a crucial aspect for the evidence pertaining to the authors argument that juveniles are being treated unfairly. The author uses this piece of information so that the reader is automatically drawn to the author's viewpoint. The author uses diction when saying things like "mandatory life sentence", the reader is drawn in and shocked. Such harsh things are interesting to the reader, drawing them in. The imagery used in this article is depressing. It gives the idea of someone fifteen years old, who may have come from a harsh background and made a mistake, sentenced to a life in prison. No second chances. This is a disturbing thought to me as it is to other readers I am sure. These techniques are used in such a way that the reader is curious about other rulings on juveniles and what the courts and the states are doing about the injustices.
The author's voice is strong in this piece, showing their passion for the topic of juvenile injustice through examples of cruel state legislature that are in effect around America. These states and courts are not giving the juveniles a chance to "rehabilitate" as said in the article. These examples provide the reader with the reasoning they need to be on the authors side of the subject.
Hey Marie!
ReplyDeleteNot sure if you just posted this early or haven't gotten around to the other one yet, but I will comment on this one all the same!
1. In the first para you say "as was said in the title" and that really isn't needed at all, so just be careful of being concise in the future on all levels.
2. Watch out for repetition, i.e. "the reader is drawn in" is written twice, so maybe it was just a proof reading error?
3. Try and develop each of the 3 DIDLS you use into their own paragraphs.
Other then those points, you are looking really good!
Erin Donahue